1:06 for the mgs sound. :D
anyway, ya great track. nice and clean sounds.
the kick has sort of a "click" sound in it that i think should be worked on just a little. i'd throw an equilizer on the kick and lower the highs just a tad and raise the mid a hair and the bass a little.
also, dont forget the power of hi-hats! if you added some hats to the track it tends to add a lot of power to the drums and that should also make up for the highs being turned down on the kicks.
over all, 5/5, 4.5/5.
keep it up! for your first DNB, its very well done and shows you have promise in the genre!